Fresh and Young

[aschueler]

" I see a lot of elderly take energy from youth in a non vampiric way that breaks  the law of conservation of energy"     

Oh that pesky First law of thermodynamics, but is it really a closed system you are observing? 

" significant bits didn't seem authentic"

If you would care to point out those bits...

Thanks for your comments Mike, will take under advisement in edit. Appreciate your time to read and comment.

Best,

dale

No idea if its a closed system, but none seems the less from the energy exhange.

So the inauthentic bits were the commas/pauses for (I presume) breathing in the opening stanzas.  I would feel slower but not choppy speech for an older person contemplating how many beats he has left more authentic.  Sometimes they seem to have a single long pause where you worry they forgot what they were saying.  Hearts beating irregularly/slowly make people slow and logy;  COPD or someone with heart failure in extremis more choppy.