A Cure for a Stammer edit 0.1keith,tiger
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(03-08-2016, 10:02 PM)Tiger the Lion Wrote:  One thing I forgot to mention below... (also, you're right about no stutter in the last strophe- I got distracted)

(03-03-2016, 10:20 PM)tectak Wrote:  I thuh-thuh thought that I would sleep, but no.
I muh-muh must have been awake all night.
I'm sure I'm happy  nuh-nuh now but know
that wuh-wuh what I done just wasn't right.

I nuh-nuh know what people think of me.
For fuh-fuck's sake try walkin' in my shoes.
I hated kids way buh-back when, but we if you remove the stutter and vernacular, this essentially says "I hated kids, but we were kids." Yes. That's right. Smile
were all kids then,  though that ain't no excuse.

The guh-guh girls, I saw them look  away:
and  from  behind their ears went up, a sign
that they were pullin' faces so I'd say
fuh-fuck you bitch, and  lose face every time.

Except just once, her name was Clementine.
She had a kinda tick that made her twitch.
The other girls would ask  her for the time
then luh-luh laugh n' call her Wind-up Witch.

We tuh-tuh talked most evenin's walkin' back.
She tuh-tuh twitched, I stammered, but  we grinned.
The other kids would gather like a pack
and chant our names like we had somehow sinned.

One day I kissed her rough on thuh-the mouth.
I guess I thought I loved her...but she cried.
She ruh-ruh ran away back to her house
and told her puh-puh pah.Shit, how she lied.

And thuh-thuh that was when I up't an' went;
I luh-luh left a note for Wind-Up Witch.
The cops let loose the dogs, they got my scent,
and fuh-fuh found me hidin' in a ditch.

I never got the chance to tell my side.
I tried but wuh-wuh words just wouldn't come.
The judge, she said that all along I'd lied;
that I'd turn out to be a no good bum.

She told me just one chance was all I'd get;
three months  in cuh-correction was my due.
Inside, I got the dirt from guys I met;
when I got out...I knew what I must do.

So here I stand with smokin' gun in hand.
They laughed at me but they're not laughing now.
I guess that now, at last, they understand.
My stammer's gone.Listen...listen...wow!
1tectak2016
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Messages In This Thread
RE: A Cure for a Stammer - by Keith - 03-04-2016, 12:09 AM
RE: A Cure for a Stammer - by tectak - 03-04-2016, 10:27 PM
RE: A Cure for a Stammer - by Tiger the Lion - 03-04-2016, 01:14 AM
RE: A Cure for a Stammer - by tectak - 03-04-2016, 03:16 AM
RE: A Cure for a Stammer - by Tiger the Lion - 03-04-2016, 04:50 AM
RE: A Cure for a Stammer edit 0.1keith,tiger - by tectak - 03-09-2016, 12:09 AM



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