03-07-2016, 05:01 PM
Liking this one, Paul. The moment is all it's possible to control sometimes. I do wonder if a bit of rearranging of the early lines might be worthwhile -- the break between again and yesterday halts the poem in the wrong place for me. You might consider how this would work instead:
we stopped time
again
yesterday
my birthday
we stopped time
again
yesterday
my birthday