03-04-2016, 02:12 AM
Very helpful Tom. A good guide to let the cutting begin. Yes, too many if, and, buts, when therefores and such as, will eradicate upon first edit.
Especially good catch on "For all his burning, Lancelot was not near so warm as you" Inserted for atmosphere, but came across as only a fart
Same with a number of things you point out.
As for "alter" "altar" not tired, just an unfortunate combination of dyslexia striking and spell checker being unable to distinguish word usage. Going back over it will do no good, as I did goo back over it, for I will probably never catch it until someone points it out. I believe Paul also caught it.
Don't believe I have any quibbles with anything you suggested, so should incorporate all.
As always, invaluable and glad to see you back around. I feared you found your new home so comfortable we would never hear from you again. So are you now in the city? It seemed you were in the country before. Personally I can't believe you did not move to Italy, as you see to spend most of your time there. Scotland would be nice, but for only about half the year I suspect, although it may have lost some of its appeal for you now. A pity if true, I know how much you enjoyed it.
dale
Especially good catch on "For all his burning, Lancelot was not near so warm as you" Inserted for atmosphere, but came across as only a fart
Same with a number of things you point out. As for "alter" "altar" not tired, just an unfortunate combination of dyslexia striking and spell checker being unable to distinguish word usage. Going back over it will do no good, as I did goo back over it, for I will probably never catch it until someone points it out. I believe Paul also caught it.
Don't believe I have any quibbles with anything you suggested, so should incorporate all.
As always, invaluable and glad to see you back around. I feared you found your new home so comfortable we would never hear from you again. So are you now in the city? It seemed you were in the country before. Personally I can't believe you did not move to Italy, as you see to spend most of your time there. Scotland would be nice, but for only about half the year I suspect, although it may have lost some of its appeal for you now. A pity if true, I know how much you enjoyed it.
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.