Smoking Stupid

[mackzmike]

The first stanza is great, and like others have said, the poem seems to dwindle toward the end. However I like this effect, as it seems like the narrator also feels less full at the end of the poem. His lips have "thinned" and he's become one of the "stupid folks." I also enjoyed the phrase "older girl" as I've had an older girlfriend when I was in high school, and she proved to be quite influential (in a non-beneficial sort of way). Good job.