Gentle Autumn

[Julius]

Hi Julius, nice poem, personally I love sonnets. Although I agree with most comments - that it comes across quite cliche - however, there are a few lines that I really liked that made me think of my partner of many years

Take comfort in the warmth of my embrace
And smile, as softly with my finger tip
I trace familiar contours of your face.
I ask no more of life than tenderness,  

I really felt that and the honesty in your poem really comes across in those poems.

A suggestion… it may benefit from being a bit more specific to your beloved and your relationship together for all these years because what your describing is a universal feeling- the feeling will still translate but allow us to experience it in a new way, vicariously through your relationship.  I guess thats the problem with cliche in a poem, it doesn't give us the opportunity to be taken away together with you in the poem.

Thank you escher.   I'm pleased you are able to relate words in the poem to your own circumstances. I think, perhaps even subconsciously, that was one of my main aims. I suppose it is also true that I wanted to share an example of tenderness, and this message for my own wife. It's a difficult balancing act - how much description and how much emotion , thank you for the thoughtful comments.