02-27-2016, 11:21 PM
(02-26-2016, 04:55 AM)Bunx Wrote: PsychdeliGreat fun Bunx and good concept, I definitely want one of them space cigars, hope you don't mind I made some suggestions for a quick edit just to smooth out a few things. Best Keith
Have you ever tried the deli on Mars?
Where Aliens chill, smoking space cigars.
Try a sandwich opened-face,
with protein from an extraterrestrial race.
You might like species 55.601
served on a green ciabatta bun.
Topped with a leafy things, thing
glowing colors you have never seen.
Behind the case there is Bork,
your non-binary friend who hates Björk.
Their taste in rare deli meats,
is our solar-systems finest feat. treat ?
Friends come from far an wide
in ships galaxies can not confine. that galaxies can't
Sharing news of a utopic place,
places where a good sandwich can escape. you don't need to say places again and it reads better without it
Welcome sir, to the Psychideli.
Where strange things fill you belly.
Located in the Milky Way.
Hope you come back for a stay.
If your undies fer you've been smoking through em, don't peg em out

