02-27-2016, 11:01 PM
(02-27-2016, 07:50 AM)just mercedes Wrote: Hi Keith - I like this, there's a lot going on within the static frame of a window. The 'you' feels a bit intrusive, not sure why. Have you tired it using 'he'? I love the Chinese dragon, all the tensions of the scene actually.Hi JM many thanks for the feedback, I like your suggestion and have made a small edit as you suggested. Much appreciated, Keith
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