02-26-2016, 03:47 AM
Ack! 
Pardon my French, as the saying goes. I meant contre-rejet, that is, continuing from one line to the next, but with a twist. Example,
You know that I always lie
on the couch right after lunch
about my bridge master points
and golf handicap because
it's so comfortable to lie there.
With that, what I mean is that in several places you did this in a pleasing and effective way.
As I understand it, iambic pentameter for serious and tetrameter for comic poetry (see, for example, "Casey at the Bat") is a tendency of the language rather than a Rule. In English, eight syllables is apparently about right for a gag with the extra two lending an air of dignity. Sometimes. Usually? Maybe.
Pardon my French, as the saying goes. I meant contre-rejet, that is, continuing from one line to the next, but with a twist. Example,You know that I always lie
on the couch right after lunch
about my bridge master points
and golf handicap because
it's so comfortable to lie there.
With that, what I mean is that in several places you did this in a pleasing and effective way.
As I understand it, iambic pentameter for serious and tetrameter for comic poetry (see, for example, "Casey at the Bat") is a tendency of the language rather than a Rule. In English, eight syllables is apparently about right for a gag with the extra two lending an air of dignity. Sometimes. Usually? Maybe.
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