02-25-2016, 11:04 PM
Thanks for the reads. This was in the nature of a stream-of-consciousness, noticing those poor birds nervous about having no shadows (the juncos, in particular, who rely on counter-shading for invisibility on snow).
@cidermaid - Crit is fine, I was half-minded to put this on a crit forum but haven't critiqued much lately so was conserving my tickets, as it were. I agree the transition from reality to fantasy is a little rough there.
@achebe - "Cloud-lit," perhaps? I was running out of ways to say "the sun wasn't out but it was still bright"
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@cidermaid - Crit is fine, I was half-minded to put this on a crit forum but haven't critiqued much lately so was conserving my tickets, as it were. I agree the transition from reality to fantasy is a little rough there.
@achebe - "Cloud-lit," perhaps? I was running out of ways to say "the sun wasn't out but it was still bright"
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