02-22-2016, 03:53 PM
Milo,
The title with the added article definitely made it alot easier to understand this piece, I kind of liked the mystery that surrounded it before though, but maybe I was just so surprised by the content on the first read. Ever since that "holey, holey, holey" line of yours I'm always on my toes with your pieces, that said I didnt even read "stench of death" as a cliche until you mentioned it in the comments. I guess it could be(I've certainly heard stench/death before)? It still reads great to me. Thanks for sharing,
mike
The title with the added article definitely made it alot easier to understand this piece, I kind of liked the mystery that surrounded it before though, but maybe I was just so surprised by the content on the first read. Ever since that "holey, holey, holey" line of yours I'm always on my toes with your pieces, that said I didnt even read "stench of death" as a cliche until you mentioned it in the comments. I guess it could be(I've certainly heard stench/death before)? It still reads great to me. Thanks for sharing,
mike
Crit away