02-21-2016, 10:12 AM
Hi 71 degrees. I have read this before, perhaps on a different site. I recall the frightened pieces of cotton string and the smoking with thin lips ever since.
So that is a great thing, the memorable nature of it. I love the line, "frightened pieces of string." It is interesting that the narrator's soul is tied up this way.
This smoking with thin lips ever since is an odd little detail that I like because when one smokes (I used to but successfully quit) the lips do pull in and tighten, thinning up, especially if one is really sucking it down for a super quick smoke.
One thing I am not quite sure I like is that the girl is just referred to as the older girl. Maybe just as the girl with her description and add she was older after??? Love love love the frightened pieces of string.
So that is a great thing, the memorable nature of it. I love the line, "frightened pieces of string." It is interesting that the narrator's soul is tied up this way.
This smoking with thin lips ever since is an odd little detail that I like because when one smokes (I used to but successfully quit) the lips do pull in and tighten, thinning up, especially if one is really sucking it down for a super quick smoke.
One thing I am not quite sure I like is that the girl is just referred to as the older girl. Maybe just as the girl with her description and add she was older after??? Love love love the frightened pieces of string.
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