02-17-2016, 06:14 PM
Made me think of Song of songs, probably not what was on your mind but just thought I would mention this (specifically Sos 2 :7)
Meanwhile back at the poem...
the use of almond tree is one image too far into symbolism for most i think including this reader (and I love a good biblical symbolism fest, i've normally got more than my fair share of them shoe horned into my poetry somewhere!)
I did have a slight bump of comprehension between the don't be a saint for me opener and then the let us sleep instead, felt like a reversal of intent, but then it leaves the reader open to put their own slant of ideas in here...complete with all the corruptions that can be expected on a poetry site, so perhaps this is a good thing as it opens the read up to a wider audience.
but the rest of it I quite enjoy and think it works well.
All the best AJ.
Meanwhile back at the poem...
the use of almond tree is one image too far into symbolism for most i think including this reader (and I love a good biblical symbolism fest, i've normally got more than my fair share of them shoe horned into my poetry somewhere!)
I did have a slight bump of comprehension between the don't be a saint for me opener and then the let us sleep instead, felt like a reversal of intent, but then it leaves the reader open to put their own slant of ideas in here...complete with all the corruptions that can be expected on a poetry site, so perhaps this is a good thing as it opens the read up to a wider audience.
but the rest of it I quite enjoy and think it works well.
All the best AJ.