This is Me

[Achebe]

Hi - I think you'll need to work on explaining the transformation / transition in the last strophe. Doesn't come across as convincing as it stands.

Every strand of her hair was out of place
and she stepped on every crack. I am not sure what this means.
Her curves were in the wrong places
and her voice came out in rasps.  I think you'd do better by dropping this line. This is the only place in the poem where you are talking about sound rather than sight, and it comes across as an attempt to slant rhyme with 'cracks'

She avoided every surface one too many 'every's
made of glass, and people too. 'people made of glass?' is a momentarily distracting thought
Anything that reflected
what she thought she really knew. People don't reflect, in the literal sense. So best to remove 'people too' in the lines above. Also, a repetition on the 'avoid every glass' theme, doesn't add value.
But one day as she stood
on the edge of a river, calm it's only in poems that you can look at your reflection standing 'on the edge of a river'. not only does the water have to be remarkably calm, you'd need to bend over to see your own reflection. unrealistic.
Her eyes flowed like streams 
and her hands shook like palms
As she suddenly caught a glimpse
of what she never dared to see;
A beautiful shard of chaos nice line
and said, "This is Me".  the rationale for the transformation in her head isn't explained