This is Me

[QDeathstar]

Every strand of her hair was out of place
and she stepped on every crack.
Her curves were in the wrong places
and her voice came out in rasps.
She avoided every surface
made of glass, and people too. //This line is strange. the stop on the comma breaks up the flow, and when I read it I thought "and people too" what????
Anything that reflected
what she thought she really knew. /these two lines don't make a sentence
But one day as she stood
on the edge of a river, calm //calm is a forced rhyme might work better with a period but, I doubt you speak that way puting the adverb in the rear.
Her eyes flowed like streams
and her hands shook like palms //I think of palms as being on a beach, not a river
As she suddenly caught a glimpse
of what she never dared to see;
A beautiful shard of chaos
and said, "This is Me". //I'm pretty sure that the rythm broke here, though I'm pretty bad a the whole rythm thing so I might be wrong...