This is Me

[dukealien]

1. Every strand of her hair was out of place
   
2. and she stepped on every crack.
   
3. Her curves were in the wrong places
   
4. and her voice came out in rasps.
   
5. She avoided every surface
   
6. made of glass, and people too.
   
7. Anything that reflected
   
8. what she thought she really knew.
   
9. But one day as she stood
   
10. on the edge of a river, calm
    
11. Her eyes flowed like streams
    
12. and her hands shook like palms
    
13. As she suddenly caught a glimpse
    
14. of what she never dared to see;
    
15. A beautiful shard of chaos
    
16. and said, "This is Me".
    

An interesting concept.  Before getting into details, two general critiques:  First, the title - although it's from the closing line - confuses me a bit.  I expect a sort of confession or self-analysis by the writer, which (unless that convolution is intended) the poem is not.  Second, I look in vain for background:  what circumstance resulted in the character thinking her appearance was other than beautiful, so that she shunned her reflection?  It's not *necessary* for the story, but just a hint of backstory would be nice, IMHO.

In detail, there's a better poem in there, not necessarily with fewer lines (backstory, see above) but - it seems to me - with a lot fewer words.  Rewriting with brevity in mind would also remove cliche and cliche-like passages.  For example,

LL1-2, (example) "Every strand of hair disordered/Her small feet trod every crack" (though L2 doesn't fit the themes of her supposed appearance or actual avoidance-behavior)

LL3-4, (example) "Her curves were wrongly placed/Her voice a rasp." 

LL5-7, seek "ands" to eliminate, and less common words than "Anything."

L8 - fewer words, or this could be a good place for a glimpse of backstory.

L10 - you mean a glassy river; "calm" isn't quite the word, IMHO, and becomes tangled with her tearful mental state.

L11 - "Her eyes streamed," perhaps?

L12 - an unfortunate simile approaching pun (palms of hands) - "Her hands quaked like palm fronds?"

LL13-14 - need a better word than "suddenly," stressing surprise and accident.

L15 - I lean toward "beauteous" or "lovely" in place of "beautiful," just for the sound.  A word implying gleam or glitter, perhaps?

L16 - could replace "said" with "murmured," but I'm a fool for iambs.

Hope the above is not too harsh - it's a likeable story and could be quite engaging with some streamlining and a bit more novelty.

Concluding note:  Some will object to capitalizing every line start, particularly for free verse.  I do not.