my first attempt of haiku.

[1skylande1]

Hi Dave, thank you very much for the critic. I thought the last sentence would be af-ter ages of fright which would be 5 syllables. Am I wrong?

P/s: you are so right, ages is 2 syllables. Thank you very much. I am so dump

In ELH (English language haiku) one does not generally use punctuation. Also as a general rule they do not rhyme.

The syllable count is 5-7-5

yours is 5-7-6

personally I don't care, but since you labeled it as a "haiku", there are certain rules. Also there is no seasonal word, or cutting word as is required in ELH. Please see        https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Haiku


Best,

dale