Backyard
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(02-14-2016, 05:44 AM)just mercedes Wrote:  Nice. I agree with Erthona about the commas, but not about the spelling of 'neighbour'. Great first stanza. It probably says enough.
Yes, but needs beer in there somwhere.
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Backyard - by Wjames - 02-13-2016, 08:22 AM
RE: Backyard - by Erthona - 02-13-2016, 12:03 PM
RE: Backyard - by aschueler - 02-13-2016, 08:39 PM
RE: Backyard - by just mercedes - 02-14-2016, 05:44 AM
RE: Backyard - by aschueler - 02-14-2016, 09:01 AM



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