Thief Amongst Us

Thief Amongst Us

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#11

02-10-2016, 03:59 PM

I would love to read the poem as is. Telling me that it's about Satan will restrict my view.
Persistent in what he wants, he wants us. - Could you break this into 2 lines might sound better also the rhyming seems forced.

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Thief Amongst Us - by ZacharyTwedell - 10-05-2015, 08:53 AM

RE: Thief Amongst Us - by ellajam - 10-06-2015, 05:12 AM

RE: Thief Amongst Us - by Phat Monkey - 10-07-2015, 12:12 PM

RE: Thief Amongst Us - by ohkshea - 10-10-2015, 08:45 PM

RE: Thief Amongst Us - by xyroph - 11-30-2015, 12:14 PM

RE: Thief Amongst Us - by reverentpain - 12-05-2015, 11:17 AM

RE: Thief Amongst Us - by brokenhearted workoholic - 12-05-2015, 08:20 PM

RE: Thief Amongst Us - by nikkisto - 02-04-2016, 03:43 PM

RE: Thief Amongst Us - by corey3236 - 02-07-2016, 09:42 AM

RE: Thief Amongst Us - by advocaite - 02-08-2016, 09:39 AM

RE: Thief Amongst Us - by vishaksagar - 02-10-2016, 03:59 PM

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