Falling Fruit

[Tiger the Lion]

Hey Dale. Metrics considered I think there are some inversions here. Most are subtle and not devastating, but I thought I'd point them out where I see them.

Falling Fruit
 
Is the fruit forever numb,
think you it lacking, dumb? debatable inv. - maybe "do you find it lacking, dumb" 
Or else an unsupportable bum,
that from the tree it must be hung another subtle inv. the enjambment probably justifies this one
by your insipid meddling?
 
And you call this needed support?
When more than any you do abort, "you DO abort" this one jumps out at me
because your fear of their comport? because of?
Want not their brain to exercise
needy and dependant?
 
You salt your quisling in the pie,
then pepper liberally with lies, Love this line
but now your time is coming neigh nigh?
and this fruit will burst anew,
for the truth is shinning. shining? 
 
 
 
erthona
 
Note: This is not written in iambic, it is written in accentual verse 4-4-4-4-3, or free iambic verse with trochee turns. The idea behind this sort of form is that it allows the writer the ability to modulate the rhythmic pattern to accentuate certain aspects of the poem. Just thought I'd let you know so you did not spend time scanning it to tell me I am out of meter.    dale
©2004 revised 2016

That's all I got for now. I like the accentual verse as the piece flows from iambic to almost staccato. But, even in this form the inversions are noticeable to this reader. Subtle as they may be.

Paul