I am the plus one

[Jeremiahcp]

Thanks for the input, Nikkisto, and you are absolutely right; it is scattered. That is my main issue with the poem, it all revolves around the same theme, but I don't feel as if it is connected into a single piece. I gonna try a few things, and see where that takes it.

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Ok, I have made another major revision, that I hope will add some more cohesion to the poem.

please proofread before posting your many edits.

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I am sorry, but what grammatical errors did you find?