Copper and Gold
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I like your contrasts here, and find them accurately drawn. Perhaps something slightly more clear, like "he reaches toward the gold"' would make it easier for some readers to understand (although personally I enjoy the subtlety). Also, maybe "fingers ringed in gold" or some such would be less of a stretch.
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Copper and Gold - by Xctv - 02-01-2016, 08:13 AM
RE: Copper and Gold - by UselessBlueprint - 02-01-2016, 11:10 PM
RE: Copper and Gold - by Achebe - 02-04-2016, 11:33 PM
RE: Copper and Gold - by nikkisto - 02-05-2016, 09:37 AM
RE: Copper and Gold - by Leanne - 02-07-2016, 08:08 AM
RE: Copper and Gold - by Ehud - 02-15-2016, 12:28 PM
RE: Copper and Gold - by JRZH - 02-17-2016, 01:26 AM
RE: Copper and Gold - by Erthona - 02-17-2016, 06:49 AM



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