02-03-2016, 01:02 AM
Qdeathstar, you defiantly got me thinking about the differences between end line rhyme vs. internal rhyme.
Thanks Julius and Qdeathstar for helping me clean that up. After letting it rest for a bit, I found a few more grammatical errors. I read the poem at our local workshop and shared it with a poet friend of mine, and I got a pretty positive reaction to the rhyme scheme. So what I'll do for the next poem is let someone else read it out loud to me. This is to make sure my text is formatted correctly, and I am not making unconscious corrections when I read it out loud.
Thanks Julius and Qdeathstar for helping me clean that up. After letting it rest for a bit, I found a few more grammatical errors. I read the poem at our local workshop and shared it with a poet friend of mine, and I got a pretty positive reaction to the rhyme scheme. So what I'll do for the next poem is let someone else read it out loud to me. This is to make sure my text is formatted correctly, and I am not making unconscious corrections when I read it out loud.