01-31-2016, 02:32 AM
(01-29-2016, 01:54 AM)Leanne Wrote: defiant lee lost. -- you may assume this is a clever way to write defiantly. To any reader tired of twee attempts to arbitrarily change spelling and make puns where none actually exist, this just looks like you've misspelled the meadow lea or for some bizarre reason, her sheltered side has lost its defiance.
Because there's a kind of nautical thing going on, I'm guessing that's supposed to somehow extend your metaphor but the concept of a "defiant lee" is just not right.
I'm glad I scrolled up to read this crit because I've been struggling to understand what a 'lee lost' might mean for hair, other than the loss of protective cover from accelerated hair fall.
Eve and then, that would be stretching it.
~ I think I just quoted myself - Achebe