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The Dandelion
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01-27-2016, 12:45 PM
In your last revision, I really like how it our 3rd line ties rhymes in twice with your second. However, the last two lines don't rhyme well enough for me personally. I just don't see how bane and hate fit in well enough.
That's just me nit picking though, I like the message of the poem! |
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The Dandelion - by mv5543 - 01-20-2016, 12:12 PM
RE: The Dandelion - by rhoiyt - 01-20-2016, 04:19 PM
RE: The Dandelion - by Julius - 01-20-2016, 09:50 PM
RE: The Dandelion - by mcauburn - 01-21-2016, 03:37 AM
RE: The Dandelion - by mv5543 - 01-21-2016, 04:55 AM
RE: The Dandelion - by rhoiyt - 01-22-2016, 08:05 AM
RE: The Dandelion - by Bunx - 01-23-2016, 03:11 AM
RE: The Dandelion - by Jeremiahcp - 01-25-2016, 03:30 AM
RE: The Dandelion - by Brujo - 01-25-2016, 04:13 AM
RE: The Dandelion - by BW BRINE - 01-26-2016, 05:18 AM
RE: The Dandelion - by LukeSizemore - 01-27-2016, 12:45 PM
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