The Dandelion

[BW BRINE]

To the Narcissus I don’t compare,

But dare I say, there still is beauty in my golden shades.

I’m here for just a few days, 

Only to wither away, leaving some kindred in my short wake.

But still you consider me a bane,

What have I done to earn your hate?

I actually enjoyed your original idea with the spades better. The comparisons between the Narcissus flower and yourself should continue to the end, and in that regard, being attacked by spades is more visually appealing than being considered a bane. That said, the original wording was a bit distracting...

Perhaps something along the lines of:

"But still you attack me with your spade,
What have I done to earn your hate?"

Or even something that incorporates the digging of a grave for the last line.

If you wanted to ditch the flower comparisons completely, you could leave out 'the' from Narcissus and my whole point is moot, but I like the imagery better this way. Good work!

-BW