01-26-2016, 03:18 AM
Yes, I have to agree, it is impossible to get a handle on who the speaker is referring to, or even if it is the same speaker all the way through. At one point the speaker could be female, at another time a male, "...how strong my shoulders
look in a button down...".
This is probably the effect that happens with a lot of young writers who assume the reader knows what they know, but we don't. We don't know who the speaker is, we don't know who the speaker is talking to, we don't know the significance of what is being said because there is no context.
Best,
dale
look in a button down...".
This is probably the effect that happens with a lot of young writers who assume the reader knows what they know, but we don't. We don't know who the speaker is, we don't know who the speaker is talking to, we don't know the significance of what is being said because there is no context.
Best,
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.