01-25-2016, 07:17 AM
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From altitude, each new-built suburb looks
Quite different. In vistas of its streets,
Viewed from the ground, McMansions crowd like books
On bookshelf-roads, beyond which eyesight meets
Brick walls, a man-made lake or leafy wood.
Developments seem closed, each one a cell
Which no one’s gated yet, but surely could
Self-seal hermetically if darkness fell.
Yet, bird’s-eye viewed, stark borders that concealed -
Walls climbable, lakes raftable, thin belts
Of trees that seemed deep forest - lie revealed
As social follies: separation melts.
How simple, if all trust in what they see,
To slake the house-proud lust for privacy.
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Well, OK - can't argue with that Webster fella.
Seriously, it works at least as well this way, eliminates a "the," and we flyovers long ago learned to sigh and add a syllable to our real-world
pronunciation when some poet demands it to fill his frame. Thanks for the persistent (and correct) critique!
From altitude, each new-built suburb looks
Quite different. In vistas of its streets,
Viewed from the ground, McMansions crowd like books
On bookshelf-roads, beyond which eyesight meets
Brick walls, a man-made lake or leafy wood.
Developments seem closed, each one a cell
Which no one’s gated yet, but surely could
Self-seal hermetically if darkness fell.
Yet, bird’s-eye viewed, stark borders that concealed -
Walls climbable, lakes raftable, thin belts
Of trees that seemed deep forest - lie revealed
As social follies: separation melts.
How simple, if all trust in what they see,
To slake the house-proud lust for privacy.
[Image: http://www.hostthenpost.org/uploads/b85a...5e7b63.gif]
Well, OK - can't argue with that Webster fella.
Seriously, it works at least as well this way, eliminates a "the," and we flyovers long ago learned to sigh and add a syllable to our real-world
pronunciation when some poet demands it to fill his frame. Thanks for the persistent (and correct) critique!
(01-23-2016, 10:48 AM)Erthona Wrote: Websters only gives the three syllable version.
dale
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