01-23-2016, 08:23 AM
Seeing it whole, I'm at a loss for serious workshopping critique here - like it too much, hear it sung with Dylan's nasal voice and delivery (about the era of Blood on the Tracks). It would be possible to point out the near-rhymes, but they were common in lyrics of the time.
My only suggestion is to add a refrain every 24 or so lines, being as I hear it as a lyric. There's a challenge for you: a short refrain that fits thematically both near the top and at the end with no or minimal alteration.
My only suggestion is to add a refrain every 24 or so lines, being as I hear it as a lyric. There's a challenge for you: a short refrain that fits thematically both near the top and at the end with no or minimal alteration.
Non-practicing atheist