01-21-2016, 08:31 AM
I enjoy this poem, as the detail really speaks to me. I like the way your voice comes out through the poem and shows a true connection to the subject of the poem.
I do falter a little at some of the rhymes and sentence structure, as it occasionally messes with the flow of the verse.
The title is a very nice play on words, and I like the creativity behind it, particularly as the subject matter of the poem- the house- is such a common every day object in peoples' lives. You make it known that a house is a home, because anybody can see it, yet it is private on the inside. The idea of privacy being kept in such an open thing as a house is quite profound and it is so true in many ways.
I enjoy this poem the more I think about the meaning behind it, the creativity you have put into it and the effort. Although reading it the first couple of times did not do much for me, the meaning behind it is genius and I believe that you have a powerful idea here for more great poems to come about houses being private and seen at the same time.
I do falter a little at some of the rhymes and sentence structure, as it occasionally messes with the flow of the verse.
The title is a very nice play on words, and I like the creativity behind it, particularly as the subject matter of the poem- the house- is such a common every day object in peoples' lives. You make it known that a house is a home, because anybody can see it, yet it is private on the inside. The idea of privacy being kept in such an open thing as a house is quite profound and it is so true in many ways.
I enjoy this poem the more I think about the meaning behind it, the creativity you have put into it and the effort. Although reading it the first couple of times did not do much for me, the meaning behind it is genius and I believe that you have a powerful idea here for more great poems to come about houses being private and seen at the same time.