Old Folks at Home

[ellajam]

Hi again. This edit really smoothed out some rough spot but with other bumps gone the double knees really stands out. You could consider an exchange for one of them of spine, back, neck, etc. It would take some work but I'm sure you could do it.

I have no problem buying the premise, I know from experience that dancing, sex, blasting music can make block pain for a while. The cost of its return is little enough price to pay for the fun.

Hey Dale, you gotta get out more.

Old Folks at Home (second edit)

The radio played, the beat rocked on
with music from an earlier time.
It sang a well remembered song
of teenage love “that was so fine”.


Ignoring their arthritic knees,
they lived again in times gone by,
secretly pleased that no-one sees
a trickled tear, or hears them sigh.

In this time of memories
where, for a moment young again,
they could dismiss their stiffening knees
freed, for awhile, from nagging pain.


The music stopped, and so did they.
Now gone, the spell of sweet release;
as time returned to present day,
where aches and pains so rarely cease.