Old Folks at Home

[MaksCerenWylt]

Old Folks at Home


The radio played, the beat rocked onI see that you ended on a preposition with L1, which actually works here, with its use of the colloquialism. Nicely done.
with music from an earlier time.
It sang a well remembered song
of teenage love “that was so fine”.This is a small mistake, although important, that the appostrophe goes on the outside of the period.


And so despite arthritic knees,
at half the speed they used to do,
secretly glad that no-one sees,
practised again the steps they knew.Good use of rhyme here. It seems natural.


Their little time of memories
where, for a moment young again,
they could dismiss their stiffening knees
freed, for a moment, nagging pain.


The music stopped, and so did they;
now gone, the spell of sweet release;
as they returned to present day,
complete with aches that rarely cease.

Altogether, a nice poem that I enjoyed.