Snowmelt
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I have to agree with, Just Mercedes, about the cliche. Since the poem is so small, the majority ends up being the cliche, bleeding heart. Cliches can be used, if they are used in an original way, but associating be still, awakens and bleeding, with heart makes the entire poem sound plain.
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Snowmelt - by ellajam - 11-27-2015, 10:32 PM
RE: Snowmelt - by Emz - 01-09-2016, 12:01 PM
RE: Snowmelt - by just mercedes - 01-09-2016, 12:28 PM
RE: Snowmelt - by ellajam - 01-09-2016, 08:07 PM
RE: Snowmelt - by Jeremiahcp - 01-18-2016, 02:34 AM
RE: Snowmelt - by ellajam - 01-18-2016, 02:41 AM
RE: Snowmelt - by Jeremiahcp - 01-18-2016, 02:44 AM
RE: Snowmelt - by ellajam - 01-18-2016, 03:09 AM
RE: Snowmelt - by sharon rhutasel - 01-19-2016, 05:00 AM
RE: Snowmelt - by ellajam - 01-19-2016, 06:02 AM



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