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Achebe Offline

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01-17-2016, 09:25 AM

I think it reads better without the last three lines.
I like the 'same here' - a flash of Nabokovesque cleverness. also, a nice slant rhyme with 'pleasure'.

~ I think I just quoted myself - Achebe

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< poetry and masturbation > - by rayheinrich - 01-12-2016, 11:00 AM

RE: < poetry and masturbation > - by Tiger the Lion - 01-12-2016, 11:55 PM

RE: < poetry and masturbation > - by rayheinrich - 01-13-2016, 01:25 AM

RE: < poetry and masturbation > - by Achebe - 01-17-2016, 09:25 AM

RE: < poetry and masturbation > - by rayheinrich - 01-19-2016, 09:49 AM

RE: < poetry and masturbation > - by ClaytonDaury - 01-19-2016, 01:04 PM

RE: < poetry and masturbation > - by rayheinrich - 01-19-2016, 04:44 PM

RE: < poetry and masturbation > - by Erthona - 01-23-2016, 04:47 AM

RE: < poetry and masturbation > - by rayheinrich - 01-23-2016, 02:05 PM

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