01-16-2016, 09:51 PM
I personally think "so sure was he" would be better, maybe with a comma in the end.
In case you change your mind about the second stanza, I'd suggest changing "the opposite" to 3-syllables like "the other". And, maybe something like this:
He was certain
his steps led the way
so sure was he,
they led him astray
To God he thought he was going
But his ego took him the other way
In case you change your mind about the second stanza, I'd suggest changing "the opposite" to 3-syllables like "the other". And, maybe something like this:
He was certain
his steps led the way
so sure was he,
they led him astray
To God he thought he was going
But his ego took him the other way