01-16-2016, 11:01 AM
I desperately disagree with the critiques thus far. The first stanza, for me is perfect. I can feel it. I'm there waking up, is something down there, I'm going to!!!, no wait a minute, what if it's something bad, let me, ah yes, a weapon, for protection, but not really, the madness slipping in.
For me, this poem is about paranoia. And I enjoyed it as such. I'm usually a fan of most your poems, crow, they have a breathless feeling to them, or, if requiem for a dream were a poem... this is no exception.
as a critique, I can't quite grasp the part about "divining her in bed"
For me, this poem is about paranoia. And I enjoyed it as such. I'm usually a fan of most your poems, crow, they have a breathless feeling to them, or, if requiem for a dream were a poem... this is no exception.
as a critique, I can't quite grasp the part about "divining her in bed"