01-12-2016, 04:55 AM
I find the first stanza has a contradiction. Surely footsteps imply noise, but tiptoe implies silence?
Teardrops brimming with kisses also, at least for me, seems strange unless the love implied is unrequited?
Finally, can a beginning be never ending?
Your poem reads nicely and has passion within it so even with my comments it is a pleasure to read.
Teardrops brimming with kisses also, at least for me, seems strange unless the love implied is unrequited?
Finally, can a beginning be never ending?
Your poem reads nicely and has passion within it so even with my comments it is a pleasure to read.
