01-08-2016, 11:12 PM
Hello,
This is my first attempt at creative writing in which I have tried to express a state of affairs. This post may test the rules in some way but I assure you that these are heavily related. Imagine that these are are presented on cards attached to red roses, one white, one red and one blue. I am not sure how this will be formatted, but the structure is very important. Not grammatical structure, but the visible structure.
White card
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Red or blue - the choice is up to you.
I can learn to live with either.
In any case, you deserve a rose.
You will always deserve a rose.
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Red card
------
Beyond control, it
leaves one lost in
thought.
Occupy as it does,
overwhelm it
eventually will.
Disarming by design,
vulnerability is forced into
self - identity.
Hopeless are attempts convey,
expressing only inadequate
sincerity.
Intense is this
sensation of
adoration.
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Blue card
------
Boyish embers were
left to fester in a plume of misplaced
thought.
On occasion, it led to
overwhelming occupation which had
earnestly been fought.
Dogging was this silent hum,
vibrating one until
shatter it had done.
However all was not lost, this
enduring optimism cannot exhaust, my persisting
stoicism.
Intense, was the
desire for
affection.
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I would like to know what your opinions are on this presentation, purely on first impression.
Upon second viewing, be aware of my name: Bodhi.
This is my first attempt at creative writing in which I have tried to express a state of affairs. This post may test the rules in some way but I assure you that these are heavily related. Imagine that these are are presented on cards attached to red roses, one white, one red and one blue. I am not sure how this will be formatted, but the structure is very important. Not grammatical structure, but the visible structure.
White card
------
Red or blue - the choice is up to you.
I can learn to live with either.
In any case, you deserve a rose.
You will always deserve a rose.
------
Red card
------
Beyond control, it
leaves one lost in
thought.
Occupy as it does,
overwhelm it
eventually will.
Disarming by design,
vulnerability is forced into
self - identity.
Hopeless are attempts convey,
expressing only inadequate
sincerity.
Intense is this
sensation of
adoration.
------
Blue card
------
Boyish embers were
left to fester in a plume of misplaced
thought.
On occasion, it led to
overwhelming occupation which had
earnestly been fought.
Dogging was this silent hum,
vibrating one until
shatter it had done.
However all was not lost, this
enduring optimism cannot exhaust, my persisting
stoicism.
Intense, was the
desire for
affection.
------
I would like to know what your opinions are on this presentation, purely on first impression.
Upon second viewing, be aware of my name: Bodhi.