01-08-2016, 04:37 PM
(01-06-2016, 10:50 PM)Emz Wrote: Thank you all for your comments! I hope this revision is a step-up.
It probably could use another good ripping into. I played around with some punctuation and tried to add more creative ideas and express my initial thoughts.
Emma
This revision is about 4 steps up. You've done some very specific wonders.
I can barely stay awake much less comment*, but I see you're in able hands.
I do sincerely intend to comment when I get home or sooner.
Ray
*I went on an 11 mile hike through the Muir Woods north of San Francisco today.
More Trees
I'm lost in non-verbal space.
a brightly colored fungus that grows in bark inclusions