01-07-2016, 05:51 AM
Hello. I am also extremely knew to how actual poetry feels and sounds, so I appologize that I can't give very technical feedback.
Your poem has a lot of imagry of a chaotic internal battle, mixed with something happening in the exterior world. It's interesting, but I get a little lost. What are you fighting against? Who is dragging you where and why? I know it's supposed to be metaphorical, but maybe it can be a bit more defined.
From one novice to another, this has potential.
Your poem has a lot of imagry of a chaotic internal battle, mixed with something happening in the exterior world. It's interesting, but I get a little lost. What are you fighting against? Who is dragging you where and why? I know it's supposed to be metaphorical, but maybe it can be a bit more defined.
From one novice to another, this has potential.