Distance
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I loved all the detail. I think you set the tone very nicely. The only I suggest is in the second stanza I think you should use and instead of or. I think that way it will flow together more.
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Distance - by Mcfair - 01-04-2016, 04:30 AM
RE: Distance - by Naima.m - 01-04-2016, 06:04 AM
RE: Distance - by Mcfair - 01-05-2016, 08:24 AM
RE: Distance - by milo - 01-06-2016, 12:21 AM
RE: Distance - by Achebe - 01-04-2016, 06:16 AM
RE: Distance - by milo - 01-04-2016, 06:54 AM
RE: Distance - by PoetCraft - 01-05-2016, 12:52 PM
RE: Distance - by Todd - 01-06-2016, 01:08 AM
RE: Distance - by Mcfair - 01-06-2016, 09:03 AM
RE: Distance - by browtm7 - 01-06-2016, 10:59 AM
RE: Distance - by Mcfair - 01-06-2016, 11:59 AM
RE: Distance - by emyleerose - 01-06-2016, 12:26 PM



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