01-06-2016, 05:09 AM
A striking poem, impressed here.
One tweak that struck me is changing the modal verb in line 4, like this.
"so all could see,
but none might touch."
It sounds a tiny bit better to me, and "might" carries the notion of permissibility in a more abstract way than could.
One tweak that struck me is changing the modal verb in line 4, like this.
"so all could see,
but none might touch."
It sounds a tiny bit better to me, and "might" carries the notion of permissibility in a more abstract way than could.