01-04-2016, 08:18 AM
Wow, thanks for all the feedback! This is so nice to come back to(if you knew where I've been this past week you'd agree -_-), looks like I got some work to do aha here goes nothin,
TSlate,
It seems nobody likes the last lines! Haha I'll work on it, thanks.
HungryAlways,
Finally someone who thinks like me lol. Life/relationships dont gotta be all bout sex
and edit the last lines, check 
Shurgaree
I briefly checked out terrapin station, its like a 15 minute song man what the hell!
naw but ima listen to it sometime it sounded real nice, I'm definitely going to take your suggestion on 'confused,' and you dont like the ending either?
Naima,
I like your idea on the line breaks, I might incorporate a couple of em
i have no idea what pit spaces are lol ill google it though, thanks!
Q,
You dont like the end either what the hell?!
Brow,
Thank you for the suggestions, I see what you mean on the 'confused' part. Ill work on it
Again thanks all for the suggestions, they've been infinitely relevant in my space of time.
Mike
TSlate,
It seems nobody likes the last lines! Haha I'll work on it, thanks.
HungryAlways,
Finally someone who thinks like me lol. Life/relationships dont gotta be all bout sex
and edit the last lines, check Shurgaree
I briefly checked out terrapin station, its like a 15 minute song man what the hell!
naw but ima listen to it sometime it sounded real nice, I'm definitely going to take your suggestion on 'confused,' and you dont like the ending either? Naima,
I like your idea on the line breaks, I might incorporate a couple of em
i have no idea what pit spaces are lol ill google it though, thanks!Q,
You dont like the end either what the hell?!
Brow,
Thank you for the suggestions, I see what you mean on the 'confused' part. Ill work on it
Again thanks all for the suggestions, they've been infinitely relevant in my space of time.
Mike
Crit away