The Inescapable truth.
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Well for a new poem it certainly isnt bad. There are some things that i would adjust however. For example the first line i would get rid of the period put in a comma and then put a space between heels and marked, like create a new line. Also it seems like you say the word insanity to much? Im not sure if that is just me or not. Maybe instead you could substitute it for a synonym or something. Also in the final line i would put a space between face and seething.
Nice job though.
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