01-04-2016, 06:04 AM
this poem was very beautiful in a simple kind of way. I really liked it. I think that you should put a space in stanza 2 line 2 between then and "when glimpses "because of the comma it would just read better in my opinion . And also i would put a space between blurred & and. In line 3 stanza 3
and also i would put a space between meant and or in line 2 stanza 1
And in line 8 stanza one i would break off there and begin a new stanza . Also line. 1 stanza 2 iwould write it more like " it seems as though the quality of time," i would write the first line like that then put a space for the next line.
Overall though i really like this poem, Especially the ending it was sort of sad in a melancholic way?
Im not sure how to describe it . It just seems sort of gloomy but in a good way. It was a nice read and i enjoyed it. (:
and also i would put a space between meant and or in line 2 stanza 1
And in line 8 stanza one i would break off there and begin a new stanza . Also line. 1 stanza 2 iwould write it more like " it seems as though the quality of time," i would write the first line like that then put a space for the next line.
Overall though i really like this poem, Especially the ending it was sort of sad in a melancholic way?
Im not sure how to describe it . It just seems sort of gloomy but in a good way. It was a nice read and i enjoyed it. (: