01-04-2016, 05:36 AM
The poem sends a clear message about this person missing the culture and lifestyle they used to have in india. The imagery of a tumeric sky is a strong one. As if the shoes emotionally miss the smell of tumeric in the air. However it would be worth changing the cliche in the first stanza "untouched by magic" or maybe elaborate on what this "magic" is.
It would also be worth adding a rhythm or meter to this poem in attempt to ephasise the battle of homesickness.
It would also be worth adding a rhythm or meter to this poem in attempt to ephasise the battle of homesickness.