01-03-2016, 07:55 AM
I'll try not to repeat what the previous critiques have identified. Love is difficult to write about because it is so much a part of the human experience. Finding new approaches can be difficult without slipping into cliché or repeating the work of others. I would concur that this is a good first effort. I would ask what the "incentive" is that is irresistible to love another person? Is it the lure of another's love drawing the person who is speaking? Why are Truly, True and True capitalized in the first verse? What do you want these words to convey? Finally, the reference to a "sickle's compass" confuses me. Does this refer to what guides the sickle? Keep at it, revision is the key word.