01-03-2016, 05:05 AM
(01-01-2016, 02:20 PM)Qdeathstar Wrote: The drips tick and tap my windshield
as obedient wipers erase all impact
of rain drops' final act of expression
Streaming down my glass ending in a lifeless puddle
Why should rain wage battles
against gravity,
rising in a cloud to glimpse the Sun
only to crash back to murk?
I like the style of it, except there is no transition between the content of the single line and the last stanza. I like both, but there is no connection to show how they work together in the piece as a whole.