True Intentions

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One of my first poems. Feedback is appreciated.

The irresistible incentive to love another
Is one Truly unmatched
The True bliss of her soft lips
Is a True, divine gift

Her zephyr-like gaze, entrenched with the deepest sapphire
Has pierced the depths of my unreachable soul
A stroke undisputedly delighting caresses my skin
She must be an angel, undoubtedly akin

The tranquil air melts, the hourglass drips
I tell myself "Loves not Times fool" 
Her lips become vapid and wearisome
The sapphire shade fades into apparition

His bending sickle's compass came 
Only to reveal the nightmare Life-in-Death

The irresistible incentive to love another
Is one without True Intentions

Rosanik has some good feedback for you about cliches and abstractions.  I will add to also consider word variation.  You use the word true or a derivative three times in your first stanza.  For me this started to get interesting with the hourglass.  It seems like you didn't quite end this...I have the impression that this loved person with the sapphire gaze was only a dream or an illusion...I do not quite get your ending.  I think you are saying that one tends to love the wrong person who cannot love back properly?

This is a terrific first attempt though...remember to describe using concrete details rather than intellectual (abstract ones) and to use fresh language rather than overused (cliche).  Love is a tough one not to use cliche, so you have to reach.  I find the hourglass stanza interesting.

In that stanza im trying to convey the inevitable end of love with time. I have an original version where the second stanza is very different without the abstract metaphors but i decided to keep them to add emphasise of this womans beauty. Thanks for the feedback though i will work on it.