01-02-2016, 03:57 AM
I've especially enjoyed the central message of this poem, and the literary devices that are used to convey this message.
I particularly liked the imagery of the stars smoothly transitioned into the image of being "adorned in expensive cars?". There could be a slight reference the celebrities dominating the entertainment sector, and that appreciation for poetry has been lost in the appreciation of today's movie stars and celebrities driving those "expensive cars". However, this is a very far-fetched train of thought and is difficult to interpret what you're actually trying to convey.
Furthermore, the repetition of the word "wall" in the penultimate stanza disrupts the flow of the poem, and especially stands out when its preceding two rhyming couplets but can be easily fixed. Overall, I've enjoyed reading the poem and suggest it just needs to be polished in certain areas.
I particularly liked the imagery of the stars smoothly transitioned into the image of being "adorned in expensive cars?". There could be a slight reference the celebrities dominating the entertainment sector, and that appreciation for poetry has been lost in the appreciation of today's movie stars and celebrities driving those "expensive cars". However, this is a very far-fetched train of thought and is difficult to interpret what you're actually trying to convey.
Furthermore, the repetition of the word "wall" in the penultimate stanza disrupts the flow of the poem, and especially stands out when its preceding two rhyming couplets but can be easily fixed. Overall, I've enjoyed reading the poem and suggest it just needs to be polished in certain areas.